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and the nights were far too long
while we both sung those old songs
at the top of our bursting lungs

you were the hard candy to my cavity
and with you i defied gravity
and floated up to the moon

leaving was your best mistake
but i still wake up and shake
while you forget that i existed
I'm actually quite fond of this.
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silent-entrance Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
so am i
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Ajiitha Featured By Owner Sep 4, 2010  Student Writer
your imagination is incredible.
wow.
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golden-girl16 Featured By Owner Jun 9, 2010
clever use of rhyme (or lack of i should say) at the end there.
congrats on the DLD (:
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:iconkatelynplz:
Katelynplz Featured By Owner Jun 9, 2010
:3 thank you.
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Felka-wolf Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
featured :D
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AlecBell Featured By Owner Jun 2, 2010
Neatly done. Congratulations on your DLD

(possibly a "that" in the last line would preserve the metre?)
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:iconkatelynplz:
Katelynplz Featured By Owner Jun 2, 2010
Thank you! And I totally agree, thanks again.
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TheScorpionBoy Featured By Owner Jun 2, 2010
I like the paradox of "best mistake" and the power of the subsequent rhyme. Magnificent :D
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Katelynplz Featured By Owner Jun 2, 2010
(: Thank you!
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CartheInsane Featured By Owner Jun 2, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
I'm quite fond of it, too. :)
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